There are people who are quite opinion-resistant. I could actually not care if wants to stick to his guns. The woman was apparently still open to suggestions – the man absolutely not. It's a pity for the woman, who seemingly also has the "something's not right here" feeling, like everyone here does (except, of course, the esteemed gentleman). What I want to say here is this: I am one more opinion that says: , your draft is crap. But judging by how you present yourself here, you wouldn’t even believe it if 8 billion people told you your draft is crap. And on top of that: there’s no helping you, when it comes to draft suggestions from Katja you completely ignore them, and you’re even so brazen as to say: "My 'new' draft already quite resembles Katja’s." No, it really doesn’t! Personally, I am always most amazed by the angelic patience of the people here who are trying to help. Regards